Introductory paragraph

(Thesis)

Gallaudet has had a football team for many years. Recently, some students, faculty and administrators have said that we should disband the football team. I agree. I think Gallaudet should disband the football team.

First supporting paragraph

The first reason is that the football players' grades might improve. Each fall semester, several football players get low grades because they spend so much time practicing their sport. For example, one smart boy in my biology class last fall started the semester with an "A" average. Then he started practicing football every afternoon and he did not have time to study for his biology tests. By the end of football season in November, his average had dropped to "D." His parents and VR counselor were so angry that he had to withdraw in December. Almost 25 percent of the football players go on AP at the end of the fall semester. If Gallaudet disbands the football team, then the players' grades might improve. My biology classmate could get an "A" instead of a "D," and Gallaudet probably will have fewer students get on AP in December.

Second supporting paragraph

Second, Gallaudet should disband the football team because Gallaudet might save money. Every year Gallaudet has to pay more than $100,000 to support the football team. The coaches salaries add up to more than $50,000, and new equipment costs about $10,000. Insurance costs about $7,000. Also, maintenance of the field and of the old equipment costs as much as new equipment. Furthermore, Gallaudet has to pay for transportation, public relations, telephone calls to parents and other schools. All this is very expensive, but Gallaudet does not earn much money from selling tickets. If we disband the football team, Gallaudet will have more than $100,000 to spend on important other costs, like better furniture in the dorms and classes. Students and faculty would both benefit from the extra money.

Third supporting paragraph

The last reason why Gallaudet should disband the football team is that football players will have fewer injuries. During football season, several players get hurt. Most players have bumps and bruises, but some have very serious injuries such as broken bones and deep lacerations. Although Gallaudet has been lucky, in some schools, football players have died from heart attacks and broken necks. My roommate's boyfriend still walks with a limp from a football injury he received two years ago. If Gallaudet disbands the football team, we will have healthier students. Football players will not have to miss classes or wear casts anymore. The total rate of injury may be reduced by 50 percent in the fall, and more boys will be able to dance at the Rock Festival in the spring.

Concluding paragraph

To sum up, if Gallaudet disbands the football team, there will be several improvements. The football players may get better grades, and Gallaudet might save money. In addition, football players will have fewer juries. Therefore, I think that Gallaudet should disband the football team.

Introductory paragraph

(Thesis)

Gallaudet has had a football team for many years. Recently, some students, faculty and administrators have said that we should disband the football team. I disagree. I think Gallaudet should not disband the football team for three reasons.

First supporting paragraph

The first reason is that the fans will be disappointed. During the football season, students, faculty and staff enjoy going to games and rooting for the Bison. Everyone gets excited and yells for the home team, which is great fun. Also, students and faculty share something important when they cheer together. Most of the time, students and faculty feel like they are fighting, so it is nice when they both can feel the same way about a football team. In addition, fans talk about football all the time, which is exciting because everyone discusses the game together. If Gallaudet disbands the football team, everyone will be disappointed. Fans will have no game to go to on Saturday, and won't be able to cheer and shout. They will feel empty and frustrated. Students will have one less thing in common with faculty, and the exciting Monday discussions will disappear.

Second supporting paragraph

The second reason why Gallaudet should not disband the football team is that Gallaudet will lose publicity. Now, Gallaudet gets a lot of free advertising because our name appears in the newspaper and on TV each time we play a football game. Our university is very small, but people see our name when they read the sports pages and listen to the news. Also, when Gallaudet had a winning season several years ago, reporters talked about us all over the U.S. and Canada. Some people heard about us for the first time. If Gallaudet disbands the football team, then we will lose all that free advertising. Our name will not appear in the newspaper or on TV, and we will become invisible. We will have to spend more money to advertise Gallaudet and to recruit more students.

Third supporting paragraph

Finally, Gallaudet should not disband the football team because the football players might decide to leave. Our football players come to Gallaudet excited and eager to play on our team. They work hard and feel proud of themselves and their university because they play on a fine team. If Gallaudet disbands the football team, the players will lose their enthusiasm. They will have nothing to do at four each day, and their Saturdays will be empty. Their excitement about Gallaudet will be reduced, and they might want to transfer to another school.

Concluding paragraph

If Gallaudet disbands the football team, there will be several problems. The fans will be disappointed, and Gallaudet will lose publicity. Furthermore, football players might leave. In my opinion, Gallaudet should not disband the football team.